Commentary = Chapter Five

Trying to decide whether or not to redo the starts of chapter four. I have been reading it over and I think it might sound too arrogant. Too early in the book for her to be thinking about herself this way. It could be good though because it is background and shows her skewed self-esteem. She is aware that guys find her attractive but she still doesn’t feel like she is worthy. But at the same time that can show that she is wise…she is attractive and she knows that ISN’T what makes her worthy. Later she will see that only God can make her worthy.

Your thoughts? Keep it or lose it?

I kinda what to keep it because I want the insight into the character. Maybe I will even though I think she sounds arrogant.

We’ll see. Please post your thoughts.